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November 2, 2005
An unusual but engaging love poem, go ahead and get lost in Blue Skies by ~white-joke
Featured by imperfect
Suggested by SparrowSong
Literature Text
Thine eyes, at night, reply
with glimpses, torrents and throes;
batting lashes as phoenix ashes,
skips of stone on open shores.
Wax to wane to bend friendly,
may this season be neverending:
rain drops on top,
wholesome sun on sole,
frosted futures,
the non-stop motion of blossoms.
Thine eyes, at times, defy
all psychic laws,
some physical, too;
there's whimsy, lipstick, demure posture -
one is lost in you.
The trickle that tickles the seed
is budding infinitely;
deafening, blinding, enlightening –
thou shine through aquamarine dreams:
this is what it must be like to see.
with glimpses, torrents and throes;
batting lashes as phoenix ashes,
skips of stone on open shores.
Wax to wane to bend friendly,
may this season be neverending:
rain drops on top,
wholesome sun on sole,
frosted futures,
the non-stop motion of blossoms.
Thine eyes, at times, defy
all psychic laws,
some physical, too;
there's whimsy, lipstick, demure posture -
one is lost in you.
The trickle that tickles the seed
is budding infinitely;
deafening, blinding, enlightening –
thou shine through aquamarine dreams:
this is what it must be like to see.
a poem.
© 2004 - 2024 white-joke
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I enjoyed some of the wordplay in this poem ("sun on sole" works really well), and the rhyming, internal and otherwise, is pretty solid. Why the thees and thines though? It's very archaic. Are you acknowledge the Romantic roots of the poem? I'm not sure it's necessary--in that way, at least. Is it supposed to a mockery? The rest of the poem doesn't acknowledge this tone. In addition, grammar like "thou shine" isn't proper conjugation--shineth is required, if thou is used.